Edit 5: Homecoming

[Knot]

Hi Alex,
condensed for you consideration.


Coming Home

Tia Yenia's buttery ojaldas call
the province to a celebration;
roasted pig, that morning's catch,
fried plantains. [This year's bounty.]

[The lined faces, unchanging
as the course of country rivers.]
My great-grandparents [dancing,
amidst all the abundance,
to the] music of my homecoming.


I still think you need more 'feast' elements.
See if you can make the reader salivate.

Best, Knot.