12-29-2017, 02:39 AM
Hey Richard and vagabond
Thanks for all your suggestions. I've always had this thing with creating convoluted sentences, something I wish to improve on in the future. I've also switched the POV so I'd like to hear how that worked out. Oh and the horse hooves kissing the mud is more like a sound effect than a piece of imagery. Here's an edit.
Thanks for all your suggestions. I've always had this thing with creating convoluted sentences, something I wish to improve on in the future. I've also switched the POV so I'd like to hear how that worked out. Oh and the horse hooves kissing the mud is more like a sound effect than a piece of imagery. Here's an edit.