How to kill a classic
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(12-19-2017, 03:54 AM)Keith Wrote:  All it takes is one blast
around the block.
Small hands grip the cool metal               wondered about "small hands".. teens would have pretty adult-sized hands..
of the Bonnevilles blue and white.
Dad keeping you safe
with his James Dean cigarette.                 love this surreal connection.     there´s a lot in this line about admiration, false sense of security and maybe something else you wanted to be understood

Something starts with that rush of air,          i like how the rush is taken up 4 lines later again.
oil moves beneath the bearing,
each racing line scrubbed and skutched,    "skutched" was a difficult word for me.. is it testing limits?
the mad mile of adrenaline.

All it takes is ten pints                                 
and a girlfriend away at uni.            
A fight over fruit bowl keys                      
at two in the morning,
when good ideas
only get as far the first corner.               


i get a scene (cool motorcycles, drunken driving, accident) and a sad point (from my subjective view),
 but probably by far not all that is said in your poem. especially the fruit bowl seems to imply something i can´t sort in.
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How to kill a classic - by Keith - 12-19-2017, 03:54 AM
RE: How to kill a classic - by vagabond - 12-19-2017, 06:28 AM
RE: How to kill a classic - by Keith - 12-21-2017, 06:13 AM
RE: How to kill a classic - by Knot - 12-20-2017, 01:28 AM
RE: How to kill a classic - by nibbed - 12-21-2017, 07:00 AM
RE: How to kill a classic - by Keith - 12-21-2017, 08:19 AM



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