12-19-2017, 06:28 AM
(12-19-2017, 03:54 AM)Keith Wrote: All it takes is one blast
around the block.
Small hands grip the cool metal wondered about "small hands".. teens would have pretty adult-sized hands..
of the Bonnevilles blue and white.
Dad keeping you safe
with his James Dean cigarette. love this surreal connection. there´s a lot in this line about admiration, false sense of security and maybe something else you wanted to be understood
Something starts with that rush of air, i like how the rush is taken up 4 lines later again.
oil moves beneath the bearing,
each racing line scrubbed and skutched, "skutched" was a difficult word for me.. is it testing limits?
the mad mile of adrenaline.
All it takes is ten pints
and a girlfriend away at uni.
A fight over fruit bowl keys
at two in the morning,
when good ideas
only get as far the first corner.
i get a scene (cool motorcycles, drunken driving, accident) and a sad point (from my subjective view),
but probably by far not all that is said in your poem. especially the fruit bowl seems to imply something i can´t sort in.
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