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Although I’m Dust

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12-15-2017, 02:57 AM

(12-10-2017, 09:45 AM)shemthepenman Wrote:
which she mistakenly took as a compliment.

This line is clunky and needs to be reworked. I'd consider choosing a stronger verb so that you wouldn't have to modify it with an adverb.

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Although I’m Dust - by shemthepenman - 12-10-2017, 09:45 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by vagabond - 12-14-2017, 01:19 PM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by nibbed - 12-14-2017, 05:50 PM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by shemthepenman - 12-15-2017, 01:00 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by nibbed - 12-15-2017, 02:44 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by ellajam - 12-15-2017, 03:52 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by Lizzie - 12-15-2017, 02:57 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by shemthepenman - 12-15-2017, 06:22 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by RiverNotch - 12-18-2017, 11:41 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by shemthepenman - 12-18-2017, 12:06 PM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by nibbed - 12-21-2017, 03:47 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by shemthepenman - 12-21-2017, 05:38 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by nibbed - 12-21-2017, 06:00 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by Leanne - 12-21-2017, 05:59 AM

RE: Although I’m Dust - by shemthepenman - 12-21-2017, 08:34 AM

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