Letting Go of Clarity

[Knot]

Hi flagthrower.
Your title appears to be at odds with the poem,
as N seems to be finding clarity, not letting go of it,
and, given the repetition of 'clear' it reads like a poor pun.

You should have been more clear -
Is there a reason this line is not
You should have been clearer ?
clear like the air you breathe
in the north, in the forests, in the mountains
of your town.

I longed for dependability
like the foaming tides
never ceasing to crash and recede,
but you pulled back and pushed out.
The image works but the phrasing seems a bit off
to me. Nice sonics in the third line.

Your sweet sweat dripped down
like the early morning dew
that collects on petals and
slowly rolls down.
This appears to be quite distinct from the first two verses
and does not seem to follow on from them.

I think the last line of each of the first three stanzas is unnecessary,

But, on the other hand,
There's an emotion in S1 that is not present here.
'on the other hand' suggests a calm/rational
weighing up (as opposed to the 'frustration' of S1/2)
I saw through you,
like the water in Antarctica,
so clear you feel like you are in space.
Battling ignorance with honesty,
I couldn't tell up from down.

Grounded now, I drill a hole
deep in the ice.
It's so cold your insides will freeze,
and I let you down.
I am falling, too,
then floating, free.

These two verses seem a little muddled.
I'm not quite sure what it is your trying to say,
(or why you're saying it in this way).

I think you had a nice idea in the original version,
the first line repetition, but you might rework it as;
You should have been...[clearer/dependable/...]
and then elaborate on that attribute.
I'd also suggest tightening each verse to three lines.

Best, Knot.