|
Constellations
|
|
12-13-2017, 04:24 AM
My biggest suggestion would be use of more imagery and poetic language (smilies, metaphors, etc.). Personification could do really well in the context of this poem as the night sky or the constellations themselves as entities. Furthermore, rhyme is great - but it's important to break up the stanzas with other vocabulary. It helps the poem flow in a way that isn't so stale. Otherwise, nice job.
|
|
« Next Oldest | Next Newest »
|
| Messages In This Thread |
|
Constellations - by Dcandy925 - 09-12-2017, 01:49 PM
RE: Constellations - by Achebe - 09-12-2017, 02:43 PM
RE: Constellations - by billy - 09-12-2017, 04:09 PM
RE: Constellations - by ClaireLou - 09-15-2017, 07:34 PM
RE: Constellations - by JMannUK - 09-16-2017, 05:15 AM
RE: Constellations - by Mopkins - 12-08-2017, 10:03 PM
RE: Constellations - by illuminations - 12-10-2017, 03:15 AM
RE: Constellations - by sarahfrance - 12-13-2017, 04:24 AM
RE: Constellations - by __rat__ - 12-13-2017, 06:02 PM
RE: Constellations - by PoetryWheel - 12-14-2017, 03:52 AM
RE: Constellations - by Lavieboheme - 12-15-2017, 08:59 AM
RE: Constellations - by elektric_timewarp - 01-02-2018, 10:39 PM
RE: Constellations - by moot - 01-22-2018, 05:17 PM
RE: Constellations - by moot - 01-23-2018, 04:45 PM
RE: Constellations - by yimbus - 01-26-2018, 12:31 PM
|
