01-11-2010, 04:11 PM
I think the last line could be changed... my first thought upon reading it was that it was a poem on suicide, 
which clearly isn't your intention LOL
The sense I got is it's about how our own thoughts are fleeting. Even though they're "written down" they don't retain the same shape in your mind. I like it.
which clearly isn't your intention LOLThe sense I got is it's about how our own thoughts are fleeting. Even though they're "written down" they don't retain the same shape in your mind. I like it.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?