Coastal Features

[Keith]

nature as a mirror,  your images manage to turn the outside in  .. esp. L4 and L5.
love the dual "whetted"  and the feeling of subtle danger accompanying the foodprints being washed away on the shore.

it somehow made me think of a painting.. though it doesn´t fit the poem very well (don´t have a profound knowledge of paintings to chose from anyway)
https://www.thinglink.com/scene/658225006207041537

Thank you for commenting vaga, I guess it could be about being in a place you love to paint. Best Keith

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Open wide your mouth of gargled sand,
rivers spit their rocks from dribbled lips.
fading sight collides with ragged skies,
storm-cats claw their kittens from your side.

Footprints throw up stubble on smooth cheeks
sea-foam slides its white from wave to hand,
once again the Barber’s whetted-blade
scrapes its trade across your weathered face.

And should I dare to climb and brush bleached curls
of coloured shrubs that wave across your brow.
Then I could rest and feel the pounding calm,
that calls me here to heal within your arms.

I bet you like that barbers sword on your weathered face lol but great economy and your images are very powerful indeed!

Hey perkinwarbeck
Thank you for the kind words. Best Keith

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This is full of great lines, however to me these great lines seem to have been thrown together. It is very hard for me to tell (if at all)  what the message of the work is supposed to be.
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Thanks for the feedback homer, message recieved, or not as the case may be. There really isnt that much to get, you could just be trying too hard with this one its the face of I place I love to visit.