11-24-2017, 12:44 PM
(11-24-2017, 04:12 AM)Keith Wrote: Absorbed by sharp morning rainthis has an impact . glass in the last line (is what i hear).
stood layered on a rugs clear stain,
silent shops pipe a dead refrain
I elevate and screech my name.
you might make "refrain" plural in the 3rd line for rhythm.
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