11-24-2017, 12:10 PM
Hey Keith,
I don't get the second line, but I could be missing something. What is a "rugs clear stain"? However, I love the last line. I especially like how you switch from rhyme to internal rhyme, emphasizing the sense of screeching. I also like the imagery of in the first and third line; "sharp morning rain" brought to mind some chilly mornings.
Cheers,
Richard
I don't get the second line, but I could be missing something. What is a "rugs clear stain"? However, I love the last line. I especially like how you switch from rhyme to internal rhyme, emphasizing the sense of screeching. I also like the imagery of in the first and third line; "sharp morning rain" brought to mind some chilly mornings.
Cheers,
Richard
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