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Push
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11-14-2017, 10:57 AM
The main opportunity I see for you here is to include more metaphor/simile/imagery. There's not much in the way of poetic technique that I can see. You have time/mortality personified as a thief, but the metaphor is not expanded or explored. This is where I would begin for a revision, showing the drama through specific imagery.
Hope this helps, Lizzie |
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RE: Push - by Lizzie - 11-14-2017, 10:57 AM
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