First Edit: Dreamless

[Richard]

First Edit:
Dreamless

Sleep's distraction ends once he cries,
dark stumblings remind me
of my forgotten dream
until it disappears in the light.

His hands reach,
this wordless command a reassurance
that all is not lost.

I used to write my worries in notebooks,
words like "Autism" and "delayed"
poor rhyme choices.
But too many of my pens went dry
and were tossed aside...




Original:

Dreamless

Sleep infects my brain until he starts to cry.
Then dark stumbling, light's blinding help,
his soothing a nightly occurrence.
His little hands reach
with the greatest necessity I've ever known.
Palms press again my shoulders,
his wordless commands a small reassurance
that all is not lost.
I write my worries in notebooks,
carelessly left on cluttered desks,
words like "Autism" and "delayed" poor rhyme choices.
Too many of my pens gone dry and tossed aside...

This poem is a sequel of sorts to "Sleepless". I'm wondering if it works as its own piece, or if I should merge the two poems? Any thoughts on this would be greatly appreciated.