11-09-2017, 11:24 AM
I love this poem. The first read through, even though it absolutely had nothing
to do with the poem at all made me think of my recent wipe out when I tried to
take a hill. Then reading it over and over I loved it more and more. It's a poem
about two-sided unconditional love, ultimately. I'm tearing up.
A Poem About A Canal admittedly, the title was edgy and troubled me
She spiralled—almost shatterproof—
a victim, a stray country,
like limbs at war.
She tortured and corrupted
and turned my bicycle into a language
that spoke to me and said:
This is your idiot culture,
this shiny system,
this laugh riot. what a brilliant phrase
These fractures and cracks and breaks
are your real bones. heart of hearts of the matter
This acrobat is your real flesh.
You're a railway
and, despite your inhibitions,
you have set yourself on fire
so that everyone can see
exactly what you are
and what you fail to be. seemed a bit hard
We listened,
ran off, hid, and spat
some garbled platitudes
on a dustbin lid. best stanza I've read in a poem in forever.
thanks shem
-nibbed
to do with the poem at all made me think of my recent wipe out when I tried to
take a hill. Then reading it over and over I loved it more and more. It's a poem
about two-sided unconditional love, ultimately. I'm tearing up.
A Poem About A Canal admittedly, the title was edgy and troubled me
She spiralled—almost shatterproof—
a victim, a stray country,
like limbs at war.
She tortured and corrupted
and turned my bicycle into a language
that spoke to me and said:
This is your idiot culture,
this shiny system,
this laugh riot. what a brilliant phrase
These fractures and cracks and breaks
are your real bones. heart of hearts of the matter
This acrobat is your real flesh.
You're a railway
and, despite your inhibitions,
you have set yourself on fire
so that everyone can see
exactly what you are
and what you fail to be. seemed a bit hard
We listened,
ran off, hid, and spat
some garbled platitudes
on a dustbin lid. best stanza I've read in a poem in forever.
thanks shem
-nibbed
there's always a better reason to love

