11-09-2017, 08:09 AM
hi Youi!
thanks for the comment.
you´re right about the clichéd parts.. but i sort of thought that was acceptable for a dream.
beside that i know that poem doesn´t say a lot.. so the rhyme and meter-attempts might be all it has.
i ll consider all you wrote and see if i can improve something.
thanks for the comment.
you´re right about the clichéd parts.. but i sort of thought that was acceptable for a dream.
beside that i know that poem doesn´t say a lot.. so the rhyme and meter-attempts might be all it has.
i ll consider all you wrote and see if i can improve something.
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