A Softening of Bitter Season

[alonso ramoran]

Hi nibbed, some thoughts

Soften the Season


Pumpkins lose neighbors
as Autumn's porch mums I did some research on the use of mum here and I think it's short for the plant chrysanthemum? If it is, this whole stanza starts the poem pretty strong. The first line is pretty catchy in a way and yet evocative of the change of seasons.
enter sanctuary's warmth:

desk and hearth 
welcome such easy pots, I don't feel like "such" is necessary here
their crowds of weary crown I'm guessing you mean their flower pedals? Maybe other metaphors can be explored besides a weary crown.
and toughened stem A better adjective could be used in place of toughened, but that's just me.
now tiptoe and stretch Tiptoe? The image of a blooming flower tiptoeing towards a sun doesn't go over well for me. Also, I usually think of someone snooping around when I think of someone tiptoeing.  
to a sun they cannot find. 

A proven stove
warms yesterday's porridge,
while well worn woolens Like the w's here.
find revivals in fluff;

all preparations, a surrender
to the ever blasts of winter's
too sudden approach.

This is a pretty solid first draft overall. The feelings of winter's coming arrival is nearly spot-on, just needs a few tweaks imo.

Best, Alex