A Night In ICU When Mother Is Dying

[Knot]

OK 71degrees, got it .
My issue with the door was that you hadn't said where it was (was it a double door?)
- the title led my to think it was the door to 'Mother's' room - but if you open with
At the end of the hallway, the door... (or similar)
then it would make things a lot clearer.
For a more firmer push in the direction you want the reader to go perhaps re-title as
Night Dance in the ICU
(I was getting elements of Astaire/Rogers rather than swimmers).  

Best, Knot.