10-23-2017, 05:01 PM
I like the Pop Clink.
Otherwise, I think the edited version is poorer for cutting out ‘Baja beige’. Although ‘the breast that doesn’t sweat’ was trying too hard.
‘Fantasies actualise” sounds horrible
I think the original also began very well. The edited version begins with a boring philosophical observation.
Otherwise, I think the edited version is poorer for cutting out ‘Baja beige’. Although ‘the breast that doesn’t sweat’ was trying too hard.
‘Fantasies actualise” sounds horrible
I think the original also began very well. The edited version begins with a boring philosophical observation.
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe