Camazotz, revision 4

[Knot]

Hi Lizzie,
I was also seeing alliteration, though in Pekingese/Pomeranian/people,
but what I heard (I think) was a kind of echo between 'Shih Tzu'
and 'actualize' which I found pleasing
and similar thought leads me to suggest
in cool summer neutrals —
Pinot Grigio, Serengeti Sun, Ecru Mushroom
(original had humans/cool/neutrals...ecru mushroom, far too many uː  sounds so close together).
do you need 'too' (another uː) after 'wholesale'?
'and whistle' to 'whistling' makes for a smoother flow I think.


Best, Knot