Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5)

[Lizzie]

Good to hear. Thanks, Knot. It feels like I'm inching my way to completion.

If I were to change long grass and flowers to something else (and I'm not sure honestly), I'd lean toward "sedge grass" and "periwinkles"--though I'm not sure the speaker would think that deliberately. Mulling it over.

My impetus for making the comment was that often flowers carry symbolic meanings and connotations. For instance, lilies are associated with funerals.

And perhaps the long grass was alfalfa. It would have the effect of establishing place which would allow you to then build on the imagery of a field. An ornamental grass could evoke suburbia. Etc.

Because you indicated long grass specifically, that makes me think: was the lawn un-mowed? So, then I wonder: is there an implication of neglect? Or maybe the speaker is trying to invoke age? Or the march of entropy? Since there's some ambiguity in the last lines, I'm going to look to the details for clues.

Ultimately, I'm not sure how much the facts matter, as long as you don't choose a grass/flower that wouldn't grow in the same climate as oaks.

I'm thinking now that this might be entirely too much hassle, but I just wanted to clarify my thought process.