Hi Lizzie and Knot,
I hadn't even noticed the slight rhyme (so yes definitely unintentional). I did have specifics in mind, and normally that's the way to go with most writing, I just don't want to get too specific and turn this into a botany exercise (which I know neither of you is suggesting). For the trees, I was simply thinking of the deciduous ones that drop their leaves like the oak. "oaks" would be a reasonable substitute. The flowers I have in view have a too technical name and I don't want to drive people to google--so, I'll try oaks but leave flowers as flowers. Know your reverse of the unblown pinwheels sounds better to my ear--let me think on it a bit (I might go that way).
Thanks both,
Todd
(so I'll change trees to oaks--not worth a full revision). Other ideas are being considered.
I hadn't even noticed the slight rhyme (so yes definitely unintentional). I did have specifics in mind, and normally that's the way to go with most writing, I just don't want to get too specific and turn this into a botany exercise (which I know neither of you is suggesting). For the trees, I was simply thinking of the deciduous ones that drop their leaves like the oak. "oaks" would be a reasonable substitute. The flowers I have in view have a too technical name and I don't want to drive people to google--so, I'll try oaks but leave flowers as flowers. Know your reverse of the unblown pinwheels sounds better to my ear--let me think on it a bit (I might go that way).
Thanks both,
Todd
(so I'll change trees to oaks--not worth a full revision). Other ideas are being considered.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson