Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5)

[Lizzie]

Revision 3

Bare of leaves, the wild trees
stretch like fellow insomniacs.

Dew sizzles in beads
on the long grass.

Under the dry light, flowers glint
in the still air, unblown pinwheels. 

I shift in the dirt 
from foot to foot, 

knowing the end
will be nothing like this.

Revision 3 is by far the best. You've made good changes while preserving the last lines. The sizzling dew is almost foreboding.

My question is whether you can name a specific kind of flower, kind of tree, variety of grass that would give a crisper visual? You have "long grass," but that could just be generic unmowed lawn grass or it could be ornamental grasses, beach grass, etc.