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10-20-2017, 07:22 AM

A few quick things, and I'll try to get to the revision later tonight--when I have some uninterrupted time. Is your speaker, "Meg" or are you just visiting the world as someone more neutral?

Also, if you stay away from Charlie and go with Charles you can capture Bukowski and Wallace in the same part. They probably both hated Charlie if I'm remembering the source material.

The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson

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Camazotz, revision 4 - by Lizzie - 03-15-2017, 03:33 AM

RE: Camazotz - by Todd - 03-15-2017, 03:57 AM

RE: Camazotz - by Lizzie - 03-15-2017, 04:54 AM

RE: Camazotz - by mrazikje - 03-16-2017, 04:02 AM

RE: Camazotz - by Lizzie - 03-16-2017, 04:58 AM

RE: Camazotz - by Quixilated - 03-16-2017, 05:48 AM

RE: Camazotz - by Lizzie - 03-18-2017, 01:48 AM

RE: Camazotz - by UselessBlueprint - 03-19-2017, 04:51 PM

RE: Camazotz - by Lizzie - 03-20-2017, 02:02 AM

RE: Camazotz - by amaril - 03-20-2017, 02:21 AM

RE: Camazotz - by Lizzie - 03-20-2017, 04:36 AM

RE: Camazotz - by Todd - 07-30-2017, 09:07 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 2 - by Todd - 08-03-2017, 05:47 AM

RE: Camazotz, revision 2 - by Lizzie - 08-04-2017, 03:37 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 2 - by Lizzie - 10-19-2017, 08:02 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 3 - by vagabond - 10-19-2017, 09:00 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 3 - by Lizzie - 10-20-2017, 12:11 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 3 - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 07:22 AM

RE: Camazotz, revision 3 - by Knot - 10-20-2017, 09:56 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 3 - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 11:05 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 4 - by Lizzie - 10-21-2017, 03:23 AM

RE: Camazotz, revision 4 - by Knot - 10-21-2017, 08:53 PM

RE: Camazotz, revision 4 - by Lizzie - 10-22-2017, 05:40 AM

RE: Camazotz, revision 4 - by Knot - 10-23-2017, 12:30 AM

RE: Camazotz, revision 4 - by Lizzie - 10-24-2017, 01:29 AM

RE: Camazotz, revision 4 - by Achebe - 10-24-2017, 05:09 AM

RE: Camazotz, revision 4 - by Achebe - 10-23-2017, 05:01 PM

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