10-19-2017, 08:02 PM
Ok, so new suggestions have been reviewed and assimilated.
I've decided to try cutting it down to my favorite bits since I got some feedback that the piece was becoming rather lengthy. I'm interested to know if there are specific bits that shouldn't have been cut.
I've thought about taking some of the nixed material and fashioning it into another short poem of some kind, either as a Camazotz part two or as a freestanding piece. In the end, I wasn't convinced that the newer additions had the same tone, but I've read it so many times I no longer have any objectivity whatsoever.
Anyway, thoughts of any kind would be greatly appreciated.
Oh, and I reciprocate crit, just as an incentive.
I've decided to try cutting it down to my favorite bits since I got some feedback that the piece was becoming rather lengthy. I'm interested to know if there are specific bits that shouldn't have been cut.
I've thought about taking some of the nixed material and fashioning it into another short poem of some kind, either as a Camazotz part two or as a freestanding piece. In the end, I wasn't convinced that the newer additions had the same tone, but I've read it so many times I no longer have any objectivity whatsoever.
Anyway, thoughts of any kind would be greatly appreciated.
Oh, and I reciprocate crit, just as an incentive.