Third Draft: Sleepless

[Richard]

Hey all,
This is all very interesting stuff I'm reading. I've included a spoiler below. I think it might clarify things a bit, but that makes me think I might need to work this since it seems like my purpose wasn't achieved.

The speaker in the poem is thinking about his son. However, the son isn't dead, but is autistic. Each stanza mentions a symptom until getting to a more severe one (the tip-toe walking). It's dealing with this that causes the speaker's sleepless state. Like I said above, I think this one might need some reworking to make it clearer.

Thanks again,
Richard