10-19-2017, 04:22 AM
Hey dedalus87, Yjack123, and ClaireLou,
Thank you all for your comments. Made an edit with your words in mind.
dedalus87- The "she" here is the titan, if there is a better way to rephrase this in the poem I'd be happy to here your suggestions.
Yjack123- More of a metaphor than a tale. Some metaphors extend long enough to become an awkward sort of tale on it's own I guess. That's what happened here. This was supposed to be a metaphor in my "Eventide" poem but it was too much.
ClaireLou- I thought ages-old because of the many eras these stars have lived though?
Thank you all for your comments. Made an edit with your words in mind.
dedalus87- The "she" here is the titan, if there is a better way to rephrase this in the poem I'd be happy to here your suggestions.
Yjack123- More of a metaphor than a tale. Some metaphors extend long enough to become an awkward sort of tale on it's own I guess. That's what happened here. This was supposed to be a metaphor in my "Eventide" poem but it was too much.
ClaireLou- I thought ages-old because of the many eras these stars have lived though?