10-17-2017, 09:59 PM
Hi,
Given the last stanza, it seems your poem is about honey. However, I was confused what the poem was about until the very end. This could just be me, I’m not the most experienced poem reader, but maybe consider presenting who the “you” is earlier on. Also, the vast difference in line length is a bit distracting. You may have done this to highlight the shorter lines like in stanza three so ignor this comment is this is the case. Over all I really love the imagery and where you chose to make the stanza breaks. The poem flows really nicely.
Great job!
Given the last stanza, it seems your poem is about honey. However, I was confused what the poem was about until the very end. This could just be me, I’m not the most experienced poem reader, but maybe consider presenting who the “you” is earlier on. Also, the vast difference in line length is a bit distracting. You may have done this to highlight the shorter lines like in stanza three so ignor this comment is this is the case. Over all I really love the imagery and where you chose to make the stanza breaks. The poem flows really nicely.
Great job!