10-16-2017, 10:01 PM
ice cream night:
serve me all
your cloyed alms
but your diamonds
on the tongue
don’t taste good
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Hi all, I'm pretty new to the site so thank you for taking a look at this poem I wrote. I need to edit this for a class I'm taking and any comments - no matter how harsh - are deeply appreciated! Thanks again.
serve me all
your cloyed alms
but your diamonds
on the tongue
don’t taste good
--
Hi all, I'm pretty new to the site so thank you for taking a look at this poem I wrote. I need to edit this for a class I'm taking and any comments - no matter how harsh - are deeply appreciated! Thanks again.