10-14-2017, 12:56 AM
[quote="Richard" pid='232939' dateline='1504582761']
First Edit:
As We Talk of Work, Vacations, and Children Great Change
We sit by a fire,
faces illuminated.
Our words own the night air First Stanza is pretty much set
I lose myself in gatherings like this: <- I didnt understand the colon here
I change into a tree painted behind a bush,
added because the painter knew
there was too much blue sky;
my voice no louder than a falling pine needle. This stanza was confusing I had a lot of thoughts on what it meant explain further down below
I stay longer than I intended,
afraid to revert,
to go home and lie alone,
my bed clean as snow.
The second stanza sounds like you are trying to say you are no one in the group you are with
but if you are a tree you cant hide behind a bush because the tree is a lot bigger than a bush,
i think you should be a bush behind a tree or something that is less noticeable that no one really sees
I am new here so I hope I helped a little
First Edit:
As We Talk of Work, Vacations, and Children Great Change
We sit by a fire,
faces illuminated.
Our words own the night air First Stanza is pretty much set
I lose myself in gatherings like this: <- I didnt understand the colon here
I change into a tree painted behind a bush,
added because the painter knew
there was too much blue sky;
my voice no louder than a falling pine needle. This stanza was confusing I had a lot of thoughts on what it meant explain further down below
I stay longer than I intended,
afraid to revert,
to go home and lie alone,
my bed clean as snow.
The second stanza sounds like you are trying to say you are no one in the group you are with
but if you are a tree you cant hide behind a bush because the tree is a lot bigger than a bush,
i think you should be a bush behind a tree or something that is less noticeable that no one really sees
I am new here so I hope I helped a little