Authorial Intrusion

[Achebe]

I see the point now. Tectak's point is actually quite subtle, though I had difficult understanding what he was trying to say.
The line lengths in S1 are strange. They don't correspond to natural pauses in speech, which is where the artifice comes in.
Now artifice is okay in a confessional if the author wants to deliberately distract himself and the reader from the seriousness of the matter at hand eg. Lolita. But that's a witty sort of artifice, while this one looks random.