Second Edit: One Night Stand

[Knot]

Richard,
reads a lot better (stronger and more coherent).

I wonder if you might tighten S1 further;
Her home, the most inviting,
as I renew my acquaintance
with the night.
(I think changing the line breaks gives a bit more to the piece)

In S2 would quoting the 'wife' work?  As in;
you lie, 'he's [just] gone to the store',
and I hate you for it.         
(Again, I think adjusting the line lengths in this stanza would help.)

Bit of a cut 'n' paste suggestion for S3, but;
As I walk home, snow falls,
blankets the sleeping grass,
wets my face, as I rehearse
the usual lines.

I think the tragic self-delusion of the final stanza works very well.

Best, Knot.