Second Edit: One Night Stand

[Todd]

Hi Richard,

I'm not sure if the revision is an improvement or not. It's so dramatically different. I'm going to treat it as a new first draft and not concern myself with what came before.

First Edit:

One Night Stand

At midnight,
I listen to the wordless judgements
of silence,--unnecessary line as wordless above implies silence. I do like that you listen to something wordlessly conveyed.
our children sleep,--might want an "as" here and maybe a period instead of a comma with the change.
you dream of things I'll never know,--this reads a bit odd as we're shifting quickly to the partner's dreams while it's the children sleeping. A bit abrupt to get here.
her home becomes the most inviting blanket. --the wordless judgements gets you here. You may not need the partner's dreams to inform the decision. Alternatively, you could rephrase: making her home the most inviting blanket.

At dawn, silence shatters its gavel,--shatters its gavel reads a bit odd to me, maybe not others.
our children ask for daddy,--good specific detail
you lie that I'm gone to the store, and I hate you for it.--love the specific character interaction of this line. Tightly written.
I wake up next to her, and I hate myself even more.--a lot of I's in these last two lines. While it sort of works thematically. I'd possibly consider cutting the one before hate.

As I walk home, snow falls gently--This is an interesting image. The covering up/hibernating, white washing--sort of thoughts.
in between sleeping grass:--like sleeping grass quite a bit.
vivid greens dulled by passing time.--metaphor for the relationship at home that is being returned to. Nice
White is the future, white as bones--I understand this riffing on a color or a word. I don't personally like it here though. 
lost in the snow that dared to bury
killing fields and death marches.--I would favor cutting this line and the two above it.
That same snow wets my face as I rehearse--lovely phrasing here.
the usual lines.

If only this was a one night stand,--I like the ending a lot. There is one issue I'm having with it though, there are two ways that you could interpret the line (though maybe it really is only me) Here's the options: 1) it isn't just a one night stand because it's an ongoing affair. He can't just shake it off and it affects every aspect of his life here. 2) He is wishing that the house he now walks toward was the actual one night stand--so that he could disconnect from it better.
I think, standing outside our home,
then everything would be alright.

I hope the comments help.

Best,

Todd