10-07-2017, 04:19 AM
(10-07-2017, 03:17 AM)Erthona Wrote: The CutGood poem, horrific subject (FGM).
Sure it's painful for you,
certainly we all must endure
your constant, loud screaming.
Sewing the rest up except for
a small hole-we would want you to explode.
Just focus on all the pleasure
this will bring your husband.
One day.
erthona
©2017
It reads well. Do you need "loud"? It feels redundant.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson