10-07-2017, 01:33 AM
Hi Richard.
I think this reduces to just the title and last line (which might prove very effective);
or else it is the last line that should be the starting point.
Lines 2-7 seem to me to have little bearing on the subject.
('Awaken' rather than 'wake' gives the impression of trying too hard.)
Best, Knot.
I think this reduces to just the title and last line (which might prove very effective);
or else it is the last line that should be the starting point.
Lines 2-7 seem to me to have little bearing on the subject.
('Awaken' rather than 'wake' gives the impression of trying too hard.)
Best, Knot.