Second Edit: One Night Stand

[alonso ramoran]

Hi Richard, few nitpicks

One Night Stand

At midnight, silence shrieks, solid opener
children sleep, Maybe switch sleep and dream. I can see a child dreaming more then I could see an adult, just my opinion though.
most adults dream,
her home becomes the most inviting blanket.

At dawn, silence stops, You could probably breathe more life into this stanza by taking out the comma at the end of this line and adding in in what way the silence stops, using that to transition into children yawning and adults beginning their day.
children yawn,
some adults return to life, I feel like you could explain more explicitly what it is adults do in the morning to help them start their day here
I awaken next to her, more alone.

Pretty solid rough draft. Good luck with it and thank you for the read.