09-25-2017, 04:53 PM
(09-25-2017, 05:32 AM)dukealien Wrote: Trapped
In half a drop of water clinging
to a bowl’s rim in the sink comma at the end might be best
I thought I saw a spider
trapped and quivering.
It wasn’t that at all ~ tilde as sub to the em dash, rather than the standard --? for shame. that said, maybe it's an actual choice, the breathing room being as warped as the reflection -- no, it still reads too short. maybe ~~ instead?
just the world reflected
with my face.
no other issues. solid work.