09-21-2017, 07:20 AM
Leanne
From a poetic perspective there is nothing I can suggest that I feel would improve the poem, your poems are nearly always open to interpretation, thus making them personal to each reader and this is no exception. The imagery you use in this piece is dark and almost simmering with an underlying anger, our ill treated protagonist has suffered at the hands of her aged dogmatic oppressor, broken and beaten, hope once sealed away now smashed set free. I wanted to tell her to get up, get up, become all that you can be. You have written a very powerful poem here and to be able to write something that invokes such emotion in the reader is a wonderful thing. I don't know how you do it, but I'm glad you do. Best Keith
From a poetic perspective there is nothing I can suggest that I feel would improve the poem, your poems are nearly always open to interpretation, thus making them personal to each reader and this is no exception. The imagery you use in this piece is dark and almost simmering with an underlying anger, our ill treated protagonist has suffered at the hands of her aged dogmatic oppressor, broken and beaten, hope once sealed away now smashed set free. I wanted to tell her to get up, get up, become all that you can be. You have written a very powerful poem here and to be able to write something that invokes such emotion in the reader is a wonderful thing. I don't know how you do it, but I'm glad you do. Best Keith
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