Long Distance

[Richard]

Hey JMannUK,
Welcome to the site  

I think you have a good idea here. You just need to add more poetic or figurative language to it. I'll go into more detail below:

Long Distance

I feel shit.
Just had a good night out hit 
and now it's the next day.
No hangover, just feeling this way. -I don't think the rhyming adds much to the poem, and I would suggest dropping most of it.

Listening to Oasis;
I never listen to Oasis.
Messaged the missus, "i miss you",
she says, "dno why boo?".

Been 3000 miles away for 4 months
and she still doesn't miss me; -I feel like you need some sort of metaphor or simile to better communicate this feeling.
says she's "busy".
I reply, "yeah I guess so",
it just don't seem right though.-Why? You should dive into the speaker's doubts more.

And now i feel more shit,
been latching onto other sad bits.
Getting all emotional for no reason,
feeling like a girl on her one week season. -This seems a bit sexist to me, but may be I'm being overly politically correct.

Am ussualy calm and collective,
emoitionless, never need protecting.
But now i think i'm in a rut - a hole, -How does the "hole" and "wall" represent the speaker's feelings? What feelings are they? I think you need to expand these images more.
I've hit a wall. 
And now it's time to strut - to go,
to fly back home.

I be curious to see where you take this piece from here.

Keep writing,
Richard