The Grape Dreams of Wine (revision 2)

[Todd]

Since it's a short poem. It's fairly easy to look at alternatives. I tried two other versions as Abu suggested. I think I'm still leaning toward the current revision though it was interesting how punctuation and the restructuring slanted the content. Here are the options I tried:

Mine is the vine’s melody;
its song kissing your lips.
You taste my aria:
skin strained beneath the sun.

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Mine is the vine’s melody;
its song kissing your lips.
Skin strained beneath the sun,
you taste my aria.