The other side

[Keith]

This is great. The one part that tripped me up was

"that carries the cure needs blood
before it can boast of success."

I really like the syringe line break before it, but these two lines fall flat for me. Especially the syringe boasting of success.

It's a very nice read altogether, though.

Thanks for the feedback and I agree those two lines were added because I thought they sounded clever ? But on reflection they don't really help move the poem along, thanks for calling them out, I will do some work for an edit. Best Keith