09-10-2017, 02:07 AM
This is great. The one part that tripped me up was
"that carries the cure needs blood
before it can boast of success."
I really like the syringe line break before it, but these two lines fall flat for me. Especially the syringe boasting of success.
It's a very nice read altogether, though.
"that carries the cure needs blood
before it can boast of success."
I really like the syringe line break before it, but these two lines fall flat for me. Especially the syringe boasting of success.
It's a very nice read altogether, though.