09-10-2017, 01:47 AM
Thanks for your thoughts.
I've changed the first line of the second stanza as per your suggestion, vagabond, I do like satisfied, it works better with the title. I'm not sure about the "my/your" stuff, though.
I agree with a lot of your assessment, Tiger, I'll try and find a better word than sprinkled, and work on those line breaks.
I've changed the first line of the second stanza as per your suggestion, vagabond, I do like satisfied, it works better with the title. I'm not sure about the "my/your" stuff, though.
I agree with a lot of your assessment, Tiger, I'll try and find a better word than sprinkled, and work on those line breaks.