The Unhappiness about how kids don't go trick or treating here anymore

[RiverNotch]

i love this. i don't care if this doesn't quite gel thoughtwise -- the circularity and abundance of (seemingly) redundant words give it an air of anxiety that works beautifully with the sentiment. there's an almost paranoid hint that it may be the fact that the kids have telephones in their hands that make the situation more dangerous -- i feel a tiny bit more elaboration, perhaps a tweaking of the title, might do (with a lesser note on the title being that, if you are to keep it, maybe 'of' instead of about. i also don't think there should be a slash dividing 'than it used to be', both to make the read smoother and the poem more circuitous.  

They banned trick or treating around here/because they said it's more dangerous than/it used to be./But how is it more dangerous?/A kid used to leave the house/to go trick or treating/and come back when he got done./ / Now you drive to the house,/and put a telephone in the kid's hand/and watch him walk up to the door/with a telephone in his hand,/and how is it more dangerous than it used to be?