Dingo (after Judith Wright) Edit 2

[Todd]

Sorry it took me a while to get back to this, Mercedes. I like the revision. A couple small points below. 

Edit 1
 

Lynchy worked one winter trapping dingoes for bounty. A lazy man, he couldn’t be bothered with traps. Dingoes were too smart for him. He bought unwanted mongrel bitches from the Council Pound. When they came on heat he tethered them near the National Park boundaries, with fish hooks embedded in their vulva and anchored to a branch. When a dingo mounted, his penis was hooked. He usually bled to death. Sometimes, one would leave shredded remnants, and escape.--since it's "he tethered them" should it be vulvas? Also, I think you can remove the comma after remnants.

 

 

A flock of stars pulses--I'm not personally sold on stars as a flock. It's a style choice so if you want to group them to contrast with the pack of wild dingos that's of course fine. I could be wrong on my usage (probably am). I think a flock pulses though if it was simply "stars" than pulse sounds correct.
light as sound, fine 
crystal-tapped notes.

 
A high scream rises, rises,
falls slowly to a low moan.--falls slowly might be better replaced by a single word like dwindle or some such.
Shadows fade to silence.--I like how you link shadows something visible to silence something auditory. It's good phrasing and interesting.

 

Before gods, before language,
wild dogs called from the void
to the light, voicing their land, 
dark matter defying 
the piercing stars.

I'll be following this. I'd like to see where you take this.

Best,

Todd