09-05-2017, 01:35 PM
Thanks for your read and comments Richard. You're right - if I qualify 'lazy' in the next sentence I can keep it, I think.
'flock' reflects 'mob' in Judith Wright's poem. Also there because in winter the dingoes come down off the mountain to kill and eat sheep fom the stations near the Park.
'voicing their land' - howling at the moon. The 'high scream' I describe. It's an uncanny, unsettling sound.
'piercing' refers to the sound, as well as to the fish hooks in the prose part. Maybe there is a better word. I'll look for it.
I appreciate your read and comments, thanks! I'll wait to post another revision.
'flock' reflects 'mob' in Judith Wright's poem. Also there because in winter the dingoes come down off the mountain to kill and eat sheep fom the stations near the Park.
'voicing their land' - howling at the moon. The 'high scream' I describe. It's an uncanny, unsettling sound.
'piercing' refers to the sound, as well as to the fish hooks in the prose part. Maybe there is a better word. I'll look for it.
I appreciate your read and comments, thanks! I'll wait to post another revision.