09-03-2017, 10:36 AM
I like the title, wilted rose revived. It sets the tone of the poem. The rose will not be crushed. The repetition of past in the poem perhaps is important because that's what trauma does- throws up the past on repeat. But I think you need to ditch the word from the last few lines, because that's where the rose is revived. Maybe the line where you say "past has passed" needs a break after it before you go into the ending. Quite honestly, as you've said this is personal to you, the listeners are going to get something powerful when you read it aloud. Also - as the words "again she shall rise" have had impact on you, I think they should stay in the last bit.
Good luck with this :-)
Good luck with this :-)