Satiated

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey WJ. I enjoyed this. A few thoughts below...

A lick of ice cream
sprinkled mist on my face I'm getting stuck on "sprinkled" 
and turned the sunlight into syrup nice
as I sat on a beach with my heart in the palm 1
of a lover, the coconut tree above my head 2 - these 2 lines feel long. I would consider making them 3 lines for pace
dancing shadows in the breeze
that rolled the waves just enough
to crash.

It felt good, for a while,
but I hungered for red meat,
the kind of meal that leaves you sprawled
on the couch with your belt undone clear image
and the tv flashing nonsense
that infiltrates your dreams
as you snore, fart, and drool. matter of fact plus a little ugly. I like it.

I sense a lot of wordplay in the first strophe. The second is much better for my taste. There is a kind of honest guilt to it. It's more concrete and identifiable.
Good Luck with it,
Paul