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(08-10-2017, 06:44 PM)Achebe Wrote:  I couldn't connect the picture to the poem...?
The first strophe hints at something political, but I can't follow ththink second and third.
I like 'lies'/'white', but not 'white/night'. Sticking to slant rhymes might be better here

Thanks. Worked with it and changed the last stanza in response to your and vagabond's comments.
The clothes in the picture are a literal illustration of the metaphorical ones in the poem.
I tried doing more slants, but the perfect ones rebelled...
                                                                                                                a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
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< needed > - by rayheinrich - 08-08-2017, 08:14 PM
RE: < needed > - by Achebe - 08-10-2017, 06:44 PM
RE: < needed > - by rayheinrich - 08-26-2017, 02:54 AM



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