08-22-2017, 05:29 PM
the old finger pulling fart joke 
with joke poetry the timing has to be spot on as does the lead up; while it got a smile from me i sort of knew what was coming. there were lot's of excess baggage which could be removed. the poem also needs more poetic devises such as alliteration, simlie/mataphor, consonance and/or others. just pick a few and the joke will improve. was the man an old goat or fat pudding, was his finger cigar shaped or twig-like, did he have a glass marble in one socket...add something new to the joke, nonetheless, thanks for the smile.
with joke poetry the timing has to be spot on as does the lead up; while it got a smile from me i sort of knew what was coming. there were lot's of excess baggage which could be removed. the poem also needs more poetic devises such as alliteration, simlie/mataphor, consonance and/or others. just pick a few and the joke will improve. was the man an old goat or fat pudding, was his finger cigar shaped or twig-like, did he have a glass marble in one socket...add something new to the joke, nonetheless, thanks for the smile.