08-22-2017, 03:16 AM
Hey Ecesis,
There is definitely symbolism in this poem. It's just a little all over the place, so that makes it a tad hard to follow completely. You said, "i considered morality as a throne to be proud of". That is an interesting idea. Why not use that idea as the focus for your edit for this poem? Forget about the ship and mother imagery, and focus on just communicating how morality is like a throne you're (or Sam) can be proud of.
Just a thought,
Richard
There is definitely symbolism in this poem. It's just a little all over the place, so that makes it a tad hard to follow completely. You said, "i considered morality as a throne to be proud of". That is an interesting idea. Why not use that idea as the focus for your edit for this poem? Forget about the ship and mother imagery, and focus on just communicating how morality is like a throne you're (or Sam) can be proud of.
Just a thought,
Richard
Time is the best editor.