Gingerly - Edit 1

[Todd]

Just to add another opinion. I think you may want to abandon the enjambment for something a bit more arresting. Maybe:

The moon is a slaughterhouse
dripping red into your ponytail

If you want to try something fun with enjambment, how about this for your third line:

and my eyes. I wish

Just some thoughts,

Best,

Todd 

The moon is full
of slaughterhouses
dripping red into your ponytail
and my eyes.

I wish you would let your hair down
like it were me. I'm always wishing 
you would let me go

down.